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I met someone.
and i fell
             a
               l
                 l
                      t
                       h
                        e
                              w
                                a
                                  y
                                      down.

            above, with an angels tread
He was
           the light, but he was too bright

His tears      and I gathered them,
              fell,
                   precious, trembling droplets of dew

                                             in doubt,
I waited, as I always have
                                             in the shadows,  
                                                                                                                               I   but    me )
                                                                                                                           fell             lifting )
                                                  light                   dark                                     back             tried )
It hurt, I wasn't used to the          purity, my          clouding everything------------and he )
                                                bright                doubt
                                                                                                                              |
                                                                                                                              |

                                                                                                                          down.

                                                                                                                 lower than he could go
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Imm0rt41 Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013
Beautiful job, both the words and their design
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dreamingoflight Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Student Writer
thanks!
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love this possibly more than I can say. The way you set the poem up really snagged my attention, and then the way you made the words flow...just simply amazing.
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dreamingoflight Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Student Writer
i'm glad this experiment of mine turned out so well! i should write more poems like this, visually :D
thank you so much for your beautiful comment!! it means so much to me :hug:
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Kerriaa1 Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013
Love it ^.^
Very ingenious way to write and also captivating lol
Well done ^.^
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dreamingoflight Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Student Writer
thank you so much!! :tighthug:
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Kerriaa1 Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013
My pleasure *hugs back* ^.^
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V-is-for-Vicissitude Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is incredible, and absolutely worth the small brain-teaser that interpreting the end caused. Good job author! :highfive:
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dreamingoflight Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Student Writer
thank you so much!! I do love it when people finally get the end :D
I always thought it was really logical, but, i am the person who wrote the poem, so that doesn't really count
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IMACHILINWITHMALAZER Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013
I did really love this, but it really was a bit hard to read. Especially at the end.
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